These two…

Posted: October 4, 2011 in beloved, deep notions, helpless

  1. Sounds like betrayal of the worst kind. Very emotion-filled write. Nice one!

  2. I would like to think they had meaning and you were not a fool so well done

  3. Eric says:

    Love must be reciprocated or it dies. Nice piece.

  4. David Rheins says:

    “steal they for sure not just me” — my favorite line, though I’m not sure what it means, the wordplay is fun

  5. Love is the opposite of apathy. Interesting.

  6. Morning says:

    wise words…

    Thanks for sharing.

  7. Betrayal the pain of a thousand daggers to the heart. Very thought provoking – I love the line “Bright like fire for now I see no more divinity.”

  8. terri0729 says:

    Sound like a love that was badly wronged! So sad. Great job on portraying the emotional rollercoaster of it. Blessings, Terri

  9. forgive and forget and let go. you deserve better. please check mine too:

  10. Jack Edwards says:

    Great poem.
    Love the line:

    ‘Prayers have got a twist’

    Here is my entry:

  11. megzone says:

    uh oh :S sounds like loved n been betrayed…
    the eye in the background was a wonderful idea 🙂
    cheer up and i hope you feel better soon 🙂

  12. Beautifully and powerfully written

  13. Mark says:

    A riveting stream of consciousness

  14. anjum wasim dar says:

    the world betrays always.true piece of writing.

  15. brian says:

    ugh…hopefully a communication breakdown but…betrayal sucks…

  16. ashbeezone says:

    Very Nice Poetry with an amazing Imagination
    Great Work of Creativity !! Highly Expressive !!

    It was indeed enjoyable after reading this one !!

    Anyways, Take a look some of my Poetry Collections …

    some of my Haiku Collections

    and also, on my very recent Work as well

    !!! Happy Rally !!!
    Cheers !!

  17. well stated sentiments, relationship is mutual.


  18. I recognise those feelings all too well.

  19. This brought tears to my eyes. An awful betrayal as Charles said. Thank you! My Poet’s Rally poem:

  20. Emotional piece, nicely done 🙂

  21. Jacqui BB says:

    I was just a fool

    Should be the last line in every poem perhaps.

    Novel and short story.

  22. caridwen says:

    confusion is apparent and very touching – seems like a rough experience! :o(

  23. William Leed says:

    Well written and beautiful to look at. Well done!

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