Will go Cruzzin

Posted: June 22, 2011 in warriror

written for : http://bluebellbooks.blogspot.com/2011/06/thursday-short-story-slam_21.html

Iam waiting

Waintin to go sailin

Big waves and high seas roarin

Cut em like smooth knife on tamarind


Like a poets rhyming

Beautiful babes singin


So nice to be so nice to be dreamin


Let ya al know

Someday my time is comin

And beware wind is on me tailend

27 knots is what I will be cruzzin


  1. Cool sailin! Nice lilting flow to this. Wonderful!

  2. Gary says:

    27 knots should get a person to that obscure and distant, deserted Pacific island in a few months.

    Fun poem!

  3. mish says:

    I like the eager anticipation that the character feels at the thought of going sailing ! Nice rhythm & flow to the poem .

  4. Altonian says:

    I’m not familiar with the dialect, so maybe I don’t get so much from this as I should. Happy sailing anyway!

  5. Berowne says:

    Good take on the prompt. Congratulations.

  6. Jingle says:

    what a fun verse, well done,

    your words tickle, happy sailing.


  7. I love the excitement of the poem, the eagerness makes me want to go sailing =)

  8. pure2core says:

    Woo hoo! it was amazing one..Thank you for share…

  9. Melissa says:

    Nice entry to the Short Story or Poem slam

  10. Serena Shay says:

    Great poem! Thanks for sharing. 🙂

  11. thank you all for reading my posts 😀

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