words three new

Posted: November 1, 2010 in insane, random, Romance
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three words new
said it loud
how are you

fate found you
two worlds met
love me knew

tall dark man
smile big bright
unearthed heart inside

saw something you
fell down hill
crazy together two

fast went life
you slept through
love needn’t bribe

singing aloud rhymes
words with simile’s
lost those beliefs

one becomes two
you know too
same ain’t you

changed i too
love for you
good me new

same way please
love now you
forgive me too

last three words
never to say
dont push away

three words new
said it loud
goodbye to you

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Comments
  1. Jingle says:

    mind blowing word play…
    thanks for sharing.

  2. Shashi says:

    Very simple and nice play of words. I touched me as I love haiku’s and your style is so beautifully close to it. I liked it thanks for sharing…

    เฅ เคจเคฎเคƒ เคถเคฟเคตเคพเคฏ
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

  3. Sumit Sarkar says:

    Nice…it was fun too read this… ๐Ÿ™‚

  4. Jessicas Japes says:

    Like the 3 word idea, appeals to me. Your little story came across well too!

    http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2010/11/01/halloween-fright/

  5. Kavita says:

    Clever… very clever!! A well written story… of so many…

  6. Jingle says:

    Please help giving (belated) birthday wishes to 3 or 4 fellow poets:

    http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/11/03/happy-birthday-eric-dom/

    Thanks a lot for the support.
    Happy November!
    Your presence adds light to our space, keep shining!
    xxx
    return favor to poets who are here.
    Thanks a ton.

  7. Jingle says:

    http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/11/03/thursday-poets-rally-week-32-november-4-10/

    week 31 perfect poet award reminder,
    let me know if you accept,
    thanks a ton.
    welcome to rally week 32.

  8. I love how this poem’s written! The word play’s great; every line has three words, every stanza has three lines. It’s a compact, simple poem, and yet you managed to tell a whole story. The only thing I didn’t like, for the reason that it made me sad: “goodbye to you”…I’m afraid of goodbyes.

  9. Jingle says:

    welcome in,
    lovely entry,
    Happy Indian Holidays…

    hope your days are filled with smiles.
    keep shining.
    Glad to see you in.
    xxx

  10. Love comes and goes, as life does. Nice entry. Here’s mine: http://strummedwords.blogspot.com/2010/11/waiting.html

  11. great use of structure and word choice. the fact that each line is three words and yet the subject read to me to be about two people was interesting.

  12. Jingle says:

    Hello, how are you?
    Reminder;
    return favors to poets who are here for you,
    do 18 NEW commentsโ€ฆ.
    let me know after you are done.
    Thanks for the attention!
    Happy Saturday! xxx

    here is mine:
    http://itistimetothinkformyself.blogspot.com/2010/11/today-i-write-it-down.html

  13. hope_rising says:

    very clever! thanks for sharing

  14. Malcolm McLachlan says:

    Brilliant wordplay and a lyrical and deceptively simple form. great work!

  15. DiamondsAndDogs says:

    This is very well written. Thanks for participating in the rally.

    Regards … D.

  16. julielaing says:

    Excellent word play in this piece. I enjoyed the way it rounded out in the last stanza. Thanks for sharing!

  17. Rashmi says:

    Brilliant poem.
    You just have played beautifully with words with such an ease that I would like to say ”GREAT WORK”.
    Really enjoyed this poem..

  18. wonderfully crafted ๐Ÿ™‚

  19. LoLa says:

    Amazing poem, i loved the usuage of three. And still so shocked that “I love you” never appeared. Thank you for sharing it was an enjoyable read.

  20. i really really enjoyed reading this
    the flow was entrancing

  21. elisajoy says:

    i like this one, alot. well done

  22. dramastrois says:

    This is crazy!!this is great! ๐Ÿ™‚

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