sweet talkers revenge

Posted: October 21, 2010 in insane, Romance
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i dont wana be a statesman
i wonder how i even stand
i can be longer wish it had no end

words to write fill my mind
wish someday i could go blank
wish so do u if i would ever stop and mend

rethink redo rework
re-read every rhyme literately unfolds my mind
i write as i feel i write with a heart nauseatingly everytime

three words or less in crowd
four words make a rhyme
fifth added so it can be defined
see what i have been through you will feel divine
good bye baby, not forever in the end

makes sense here in this life
prerogative provocative rhymes in 3 or 4 lines
fool you are to understand for you think you know who i am

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Comments
  1. I enjoyed the flow of this piece. Has me thinking about the forms I use in writing. Thanks!

    http://mysticmarleei.wordpress.com/2010/10/11/sexy/

  2. Jingle says:

    thanks for the contribution,
    one poem a week now so that you need not to comment under stress..

    skillful word flow.
    lovely imagery..

  3. Jingle says:

    Happy Rally,
    18 would be enough for you to smile…
    thanks for the egg comment,
    I am full so far from looking at it.
    😉

  4. B says:

    Nice flow! Keep it up!

    Kudos!

    Love lots,
    B

    BTW, here’s my entry for this week.
    Hope you like it too!

    MOVING ON AND LETTING GO

    HAPPY RALLY!

  5. 2zpoint says:

    How are ya man!…like you said at the end… can’t understand till I know Ya! 🙂

  6. Words chosen beautifully and weaved to form a poem

  7. notjeffery says:

    An interesting read…
    Thanks for sharing,

    Peace to you,
    http://notjeffery1.wordpress.com/2010/07/30/bleed/
    (My entry for the rally)

  8. xacrest says:

    I enjoyed this loads! You have so much abstract meaning and imagery in this. I think it’s beautiful, how you’ve twisted the phrases to suit your meaning. You’ve captured some brilliant rhythms and momentum in this piece; it’s dying to be read out loud. Great job.

  9. Panda Wolf says:

    Interesting writing style. =)

    If you’re interested here’s my entry: Panda Wolf – Hey Rain, how are you feeling?

  10. missbrittab says:

    I had to read this a couple of times and came to the conclusion that you’re one of those people I shouldn’t mess with. haha

    Nice flow..

    Here’s my post for Week 31
    http://missbrittab.wordpress.com/2010/10/20/come-to-hell-with-me/

  11. kyoichi says:

    mental exercise in a balmy day.

    can’t say anything more than a good job for this one =]

    -kyogakura

  12. Lu Ann says:

    Oops!! revenge 😦 It made me scare!

    Yet it was a pleasure to read.

    Happy rally!

    Lu Ann

  13. Jingle says:

    how is everything?

    did you return favor to poets?
    did you visit 18 poets New?

    I am checking on everyone, hope that you get things done …
    I always enjoyed your participation,
    your poetry talent is unbeatable.
    keep it up.
    Happy Tuesday!

  14. elisajoy says:

    the words rolled off my tongue so fluently. i like poems that sounds good to the ear and are easy to read through, you know?
    i don’t know if that makes sense, but basically I am saying, great job!

  15. Dee says:

    this is tight (nikhil here)

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