seven counts

Posted: October 20, 2010 in beloved, family, loved ones, Romance
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for :

http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/2010/10/poetry-potluck-seven-deadly-sins.html

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pride myself on what i have become
why shouldnt i for i am father to a gorgeous daughter
sin you could say for me shes my heavenly treasure

wrath of my anger shall rain
try hurting the ones i love
sinful will be your time as if left on hells plane

greed i more for happiness and love
for the ones i care, cherish and adore
sin i will for them just to give some more

sloth moves to slow so do i when in her arms
want to be left alone till eternity or let armageddon come
sin why should be it for its our love not being your burden

lust comes so swiftly when standing outside a shop window
i wana buy this all for them make every wish come true
sinless life would be a waste for you gota see those smiles

envy i too sometimes of things around her
jealous of the chair she sits on and carpet she walks
work i do to make a living also to avoid other sins

gluttony is the last one in line
feed on their love I withhold it too and no i wont share
sin or sinner i dont understand for i want them all to myself

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Comments
  1. RAE says:

    THe third stanza is my favorite. I love the last line in that stanza. It’s lasting….

  2. Jingle says:

    beautiful,
    you have a lovely way saying it,
    withdraw from them, feel divine!
    πŸ˜‰

  3. rash says:

    ekach number …i love the 3rd stanza

    greed i more for happiness and love
    for the ones i care, cherish and adore
    sin i will for them just to give some more

  4. Sinless life would be a waste for you gotta see those smiles. Spoken like a true parent, lol. Very nice.

  5. Kavita says:

    Brillianto!!!!!
    I personally think I liked this one THE MOST of all your poems I have ever read! Really!
    Every stanza had a justification to it.. loved it!!
    What would we be indeed, without those sins!! Loved the attitude, dude…

  6. Jingle says:

    http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/10/22/the-perfect-poet-award-week-31/

    award notice,

    work on the Rally if you can, let me know after you are done.
    cheers!

  7. marousia says:

    I really enjoyed reading this – I like the way you reduced the sins to ordinary everyday events – this makes the poem very poerful

  8. Jingle says:

    http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/10/23/6244/

    Thanks a lot for the support to Jingle Poetry Potluck, I could not always find time to show how much we appreciate your support, here, three awards for you, hope to see you in of week 7, our theme is love and romance. Happy Monday, Happy Blogging! xxx

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