Posted: September 23, 2010 in Uncategorized
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i wrote a poem
i made it for all to see
how would i know so would she

read it through
cherished her 1st comment
made friends in an instant
astronomy one could say
enjoyed the company
with every memory shared it was like deja vu written

all my life i only heard of this
strangers making past and future unite
how would i know she would read it too
connection so strong distances cant deny

beautiful as her eyes so does she write
now iam reading her thoughts
thinking why did we talk
she and i both remain puzzled
astronomy one could say
finally i write this asking to make sense
for projections of visions are read and fools dont understand

  1. Jingle says:

    love it,
    very natural and lovely flow.

  2. Jingle says:

    it is your chance, have fun visiting participants, that;s how you get the most feedback…

    love your supportive spirits.
    your poetry do shine!

  3. Fiola says:

    gee…geeee.. am i really readin this… *giggles* a conversation me had wiv a well versed person in words… she now thinks that inspiration comes in the most exquisite way… *smiles* it aint a dream nor an inception of an idea put forth… cant call it telepathy.. she wonders wat it truly cud be based on..alignment of planets is wat one would wanna perceive… *pondering* deja vu once again….. *winks*

    • fifi kind as your your words are even kinder to me… and u have a good flow with words too waiting for u to start a blog soon ๐Ÿ˜€

      • Fiola says:

        it’s all in my head… yea dreamer that i am… when i think of jottin it down… it runs away…thoughts come to me at the strangest of places…somtimes wish i cud just flash it on paper at the blink of an eye… hehehe….

      • if u cant find paper use ur cell fone and type it as a draft mesg and when u get to ur comp just go with the flow….
        i cant tell u in public where i get most of me ideas ๐Ÿ˜€ hehehehehehehe
        rhyme on girl

  4. CrbianFool says:

    Most excellent free form verse. Love how you evoke the symmetry of the occasion balanced by great imagism. Should be fun to read through some more of your poetry. Can’t wait to see what else you’ve written.


  5. Whoa…this is my favorite line: “for projections of visions are read and fools dont understand”

  6. ๐Ÿ˜› Cool, I love your words:P wonderful flow within the poem =P

  7. beautiful writeup and flow ๐Ÿ™‚ good one, Wiser Sky Diver!

    Rally Week 29, My Poem

  8. penelopephoebe says:

    This is my second reading of this poem and I like it even more:>)

  9. Trisha says:

    Fate plans things in her own way. ๐Ÿ™‚

  10. brian says:

    astronomy one would say…i like that…and fools rarely do…smiles.

  11. Someone Is Special says:

    You have got a lovely flow.. So so good.. I loved your inspirationz.. Thanks for participating..

    Happy Rally…

    Rhyming Waters

    –Someone Is Special–

  12. Shashi says:

    Now you are reading her thoughts…. very nice poetry.,. I liked it…

    เฅ เคจเคฎเคƒ เคถเคฟเคตเคพเคฏ
    Om Namah Shivaya

    At Twitter @VerseEveryDay – Sharing few lines about love, longing and life

  13. ladynimue says:

    wow !! i love such free flowing poetry … Good luck to the people in poem ๐Ÿ˜‰

  14. Olivia says:

    Dear friend, I am curious- Is it astronomy or astrology?? Kindly don’t be offended- intentions are none- don’t feel comfortable, please delete the comment as well. Just thought I would point it out..
    I enjoyed your words.. If I replace that with astrology, the last line made me laugh.. The poem is so beautiful, talking about dreamy love story. I like such..’coz I write none of these- they are all sad ones ๐Ÿ˜ฆ
    Happy Rally..
    Bless you

    • if everything in life was so spelled out so loud then poetry would have had no meaning…last line proves me to be wrong on the entire poem that i wrote above…… ๐Ÿ˜€

  15. Jingle says:

    did you finish your 18+18 poets visiting?
    Thanks for the feedback.

  16. weight says:

    yeah my dad will like this

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